Comment on Mark Raine's statement:
I just finished editing your paragraph, and I have to say that you did a pretty good job. First of all, glad to see that the word count of the statement is within 150 words. Secondly, you summarize the main idea of this Ted Talk in a very clear and precise way. However, I would like to know in what ways and for what reasons you think the information provided by this video is interesting to you. How this interesting (or even unexpected) information makes you to rethink the power and influence of CMC over our lives? Does this imply now the Internet can act as a tool that helps us to create or destroy a relationship? Will it bring us positive outcomes or negative consequences? These are just some of my suggestions that may help you to deepen your discussion on this topic. Of course, you can find your own way to increase the richness of the content of your explanation part.
Oi Kei Cheung